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Post by Jess on Feb 13, 2014 18:53:37 GMT -5
Old Soul.pdf (29.25 KB)I tried to think out of the box with this approach to Time Travel. Let me know what you think! I've included an image below to help get you in the mindset.
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Post by th30ma55 on Feb 17, 2014 18:26:29 GMT -5
First off I want to express how disappointed I am in myself that I didn't get my story done but I have a good excuse, I swear! I really couldn't get the time with all the wedding planning I was doing with my wife and we got married on the 14th which was the due date.
With that being said I'll get into the meat of my thoughts on your story Jess. At first I thought you were going towards a "Man From Earth" angle based on the prehistoric things that were happening (if you haven't seen it you really should check it out) but I think that my mind went there because I batted the idea around myself for a while. It was most definitely a different take on time travel especially since nobody was going back at all but instead we were looking forward from the past. It did take me some time to figure out what was going on with the characters exactly and I really think that this story could have benefited from being a full 22 page intro story with more of the facility, other doctors, the company, etc. Given that there's an 8-10 limit on the assignments though it was still a really good intro story and honestly, I would not mind seeing Eve and Erik again in another story involving their movements towards "home," wherever that is.
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Post by Jess on Mar 6, 2014 10:22:31 GMT -5
Thanks so much for your response! Sorry it has taken me so long to reply, :3 I agree that the story would benefit greatly from some breathing room. I wanted to create a good intro story for these characters that could eventually lead into something bigger, but that 8-10 pages puts a solid stranglehold on extrapolation. (And don't worry about missing this assignment, there's always the next one, plus you went out of your way to provide feedback. Very appreciated. )
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